Wednesday, September 23, 2015

Swing


The mind swings all the time
Maybe,
       To hold a little authority over us
More often,
         It’s a ‘restless search’ ...
That swings like a ‘swing’ within…
   I don’t know from where the ropes descend
         But it makes me sit on a plank and swing:
Forward and back, up and down
             Forward and back, up and down
    Eventually, the oscillation slows down,
I am lowered     very gently
    -the invisible ‘ropes’ are pulled away
Separation is the rule;
Good or bad….I make a choice
It’s that simple, almost.
The rest is chance
likely to
topple
if
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stings




41 comments:

  1. Beautiful, true poignant words echoing life.

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    1. Good to have you here after a long time, Arti. Thank you so much for the appreciation... I am feeling euphoric.. :)))

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    1. Thanks for reading, Rupam. Glad to see you here... as always... :))

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  3. If it swings too hard, it will surely topple. Our choices can def have far reaching ramifications. It is an interesting relationship between our choices and destiny. I wonder with the wrong choices, can a destiny be lost?

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    1. True that...You said it, X!!.That's a life lesson one needs to learn...never be reckless!
      Now, regarding choice and destiny-- I guess, if one believes in destiny, she'd suspect there are greater forces defining life-stories...Sometimes you make choices in life and sometimes choices make you...at least, I assume so.
      Glad to see you here... as always... :)) Thank you.

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  4. Whew, this is a deep one, Panchali. I like picturing that mind swinging and searching. So many choices are presented to us, I think. We swing one direction, then another, and finally that choice has to be made. I do wonder oftentimes what part destiny plays. On that subject my mind swings back and forth. Smiles.

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    1. LOL..
      According to hindu mythology,we do control our destiny by the actions (choices) we make, to an extent. But also it's all part of a larger destiny, that perhaps we do not control ourselves directly.Maybe our actions and our mistakes create a destiny (karma as we call it) which is on a higher platform.... If that makes sense! The concept is difficult to explain or understand. So, just my random opinion.... :P
      Lovely to see you here as always... Mary!

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  5. Beautifully crafted, both visually and verbally,to support what you say.

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    1. Coming from you, this is a very gratifying compliment. Thanks Rosemary... :)))

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  6. Mind is that pendulum always swinging. It's good when we make a choice, at least we could come out of that swing and it's better if the choice is a right one and destiny doesn't intervene...love this Swing metaphor..great lines Panchali di, as always...

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    1. Thank you for the compliment, Sumana... I am so pleased....! :))

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  7. beautifully written....loved the picture used......choice and destiny....it always makes you sit like that thinking....

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    1. So good to see you here, Sreeja!! You comment has pleased me immensely... :))) Thanks a ton! :)

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  8. lovely... so deep Panchaliji :-)

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    1. Oh great!! It inspires me to write more... thanks Archana. :))) Good to see you!

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  9. your description of how the choice is made is brilliant in rhythm and image - the rope coming down at the end is a perfect topping

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    1. Thank you for the appreciation... :))) I like the name of your handle....telltaletherapy! :)
      Hope to see you more on these pages....

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  10. Bravo!
    "I don’t know from where the ropes descend
    But it makes me sit on a plank and swing:"
    Perhaps it is "destiny"--or in my faith, God's Will, seeming just out of sight. Sometimes we embrace the burning bush and sometimes we fear the flames--the sting.

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    1. I guess, faith has slightly stronger implication of a supernatural agency, thereby... more positive connotations. but it is sometimes heard the other way around. Very similar words!
      Thanks for dropping by with your thoughtful comment, Susan... :))

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  11. "I dont know from where the ropes descend"...I love that line! This is a fantastic write, Panchali. You went deep, and the closing line has bite - "if destiny stings". A wonderful poem.

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    1. Thanks for your visit and for the kind words you are leaving behind, Sherry... it is gratifying to have discerning readers like you... :)))
      Thank you!

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    1. Not always, MMT!! That's what...me thinks :))) Thanks for reading....

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  13. Love that "maybe," and the shape of this. If feels like a key...which of course is much what our choices are.

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    1. Oh, am absolutely pleased, De. Happy that you noticed the shape....Like your interpretation as well. Thanks for coming by...

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  14. The mind swings back and forth when choices come its way.. lovely write!!

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    1. Thank you for your kind words, Sanaa. I appreciate them...:)

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  15. I so enjoyed this! For me, this is one of your best! I don't know where the ropes descend from either! But I love the imagery here!

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    1. From the bottom of my heart I am grateful for your kind words. Thank you, Audrey! Hope to see you more on these pages. Thanks for stopping by....

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  16. How lovely, this poem. It's depth is enthralling and your words mesmerize. Thank you Panchali.

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    1. What a beautiful comment...! Thank you for your kind words. Myrna.

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  17. Very beautiful, Panchali! Loved it:)

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    1. Good to see you here Amit. Thanks for this heart warming comment. :)))

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  18. Destiny can indeed sting...and i suppose we all know that we may need to change certain things to avoid that sting - but how hard to know what at times - wonderfully written..and love the shape...like a needle point

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    1. Thanks for you loving words, Jae...I am very happy you read this... :))) Glad you noticed the shape too... !! Please do visit again.

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  19. Well written, great take on the prompt.

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    1. Coming from you, this is a very gratifying compliment. Thanks, Meisner.. :)))

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  20. We have a choice to stand up to destiny and choose our own way if we dare. Just how brave are we?

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  21. it does not matter if it topples because then we can stand up tall and start all over again :)

    beuaitful

    Bikram's

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  22. This is so deep and lovely Panchali. Your usage of metaphors was beautifully done.

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