Thursday, March 19, 2015

Sun Drunk~


trees sun rays on road
Pic from google

Clear skies speckled with gold lace
Balancing the sun on its forehead
Shift and turn,
Carve strange scimitar rays on the road
Playful sparks…split my human heart!

The sensuous beams hover their translucent yellow
and suddenly drop in my eyes; keep still..
I fumble like a night-blind
Adjust my eyes to the slow ordeal
The cuckoos clumsily twitter in the sky…

It’s spring… I watch....
         The blooms of Jacaranda and flame of the forest fight
Over the sun in the backyard
I listen hard to the susurration of the quivering gleams 
heavy gold like fireburst settle on my face

I gulp it as I would grapes or lemon!


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32 comments:

  1. Susan3/19/15, 2:09 AM

    Hahaha! Pleasure and ordeal mix in the sun when it comes bright and summery enough to burst a heart! Even the birds are stunned! And the flowers fight the trees. Such a gulp--fast, before over saturation brings out the drawbacks ... I Love This Poem!

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 10:53 AM

      Glad you liked my work, Susan!
      Much Appreciate..😊

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  2. Sanaa Rizvi3/19/15, 2:25 AM

    Absolutely remarkable!!

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 10:54 AM

      Thank you for your comments. I appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed my creation. Have a great day, sanna. 😊

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    2. Sanaa Rizvi3/21/15, 4:00 AM

      Your most welcome maam Panchali :D
      xoxo

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  3. Sherry Blue Sky3/19/15, 3:59 AM

    I love it, too, Panchali....especially gulping the sun........I love the image of the sky balancing the sun on its forehead, and the colors in the garden. Lovely.

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 10:56 AM

      I am glad it made sense, Sherry😁. Thanks for the compliments..much appreciated!

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  4. Old Egg3/19/15, 6:27 AM

    What a glorious poem Panchali. I adored every word.

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 10:59 AM

      Thanks old egg!! I truly appreciate your kind words about my work. Good to know it made sense😀 Thanks once again...

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  5. Sumana Roy3/19/15, 10:02 AM

    oh Panchalidi this is glorious...love the beautiful language....the sun is drinkable only this month...baishakh & jaishtha are ahead....ouch...

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 11:00 AM

      Thanks sweetheart...you certainly know how to make me happy..so glad you liked this poem..Thanks for reading n for your wonderful comments of course😀

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  6. Bikram3/19/15, 3:13 PM

    Now that is awesome.. the sun in all glory especially early mornings makes you want to get u and do something ...

    Bikram's

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    1. Panchali3/19/15, 11:58 PM

      So good to see you , Bikram!! How you doing? Thank you for your kind words. They mean much to me. :)

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  7. KParthasarathi3/19/15, 7:23 PM

    Beautifully churned poem with each word worth its weight in gold !!

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 12:13 AM

      Parthasarthy, Thank you for the smile you’ve given me today. Glad you enjoyed reading it !! Good to see you always!:)

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  8. Jae Rose3/19/15, 7:46 PM

    The sun is a wonderful thing to be drunk on..i love the imagery and sound of your words

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 12:07 AM

      Yes, I agree with you, Jae! Thank you for your appreciation and comments...:)

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  9. Scarlet3/20/15, 3:10 AM

    Nice I am looking forward to spring's blossoming in my part of the world ~ Love that ending line about grapes or lemon ~

    Grace

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 6:52 PM

      Glad you enjoyed reading this, Grace. Thanks. Truly appreciate. .. :)

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  10. totomai3/20/15, 3:36 AM

    cheers for the coming spring. really good enjoyed the scenes you have painted here.

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 9:58 PM

      Cheers to the Spring!! :) Thank you for your appreciation and comments, totomai...:)

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  11. AmitAag3/20/15, 12:28 PM

    Eloquent! Stupendous!

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 10:00 PM

      So good to see you here after a long time, Amit. Thanks for the compliments...means a lot to me :)

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  12. Gen Giggles 3/20/15, 5:52 PM

    The joys of this time of year.

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    1. Panchali3/20/15, 10:01 PM

      Precisely...this is the Golden season of the year....
      Thanjs a bunch, Meisner :)

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    2. Panchali3/20/15, 10:04 PM

      Precisely...this is the Golden season of the year....
      Thanjs a bunch, Meisner :)

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  13. Susmit3/20/15, 10:09 PM

    An absolute seamless creation! What a rendition, Beautiful!

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    1. Panchali3/23/15, 12:41 PM

      Wow...Thanks so much for that huge compliment! You made my day, Susmit!! :)

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  14. humbird3/21/15, 7:03 AM

    I like how you play with sunbeams and how they ' gold like fireburst settle on my face' ...how not to smile with a reflection of sun ~ happy and welcoming feeling here for coming spring, yet gulping 'would grapes or lemon!' ~ fun! ~ Thanks for pleasure x

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    1. Panchali3/23/15, 12:45 PM

      I love it that you loved it... it inspires me to write more... thanks a ton, humbird...xoxo

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  15. Locomente3/24/15, 2:33 PM

    A wonderful image... Loved it... Spring - the best season!

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    1. Panchali3/24/15, 11:58 PM

      Indeed...spring is the best season, Locomente! Thank you for the compliment... really appreciate :)

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