Wednesday, February 06, 2013

REFLEXES


Our reflexes
Move on purpose;
Sitting outside a Tea-stall,
I found myself leaning away
as speeding cars continuously raced by
skirting the pavement and passing alarmingly close;
nothing was seemingly intimate,connected to the past
History of an accident was a completely inane thing...
Long live the reflexes for survival--though their mysteries unresolved...!


Written for Poet's United -One-word-at-time challenge!This is a form of poetry where the first line has 2 words, the second line has 3, third line has 4 and so on....

91 comments:

  1. "Long live the reflexes for survival" - lovely words !!!

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  2. Yoiks! I can feel those cars coming too close.

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    1. hahaha...It is, unfortunately not improbable in India!! Thanks!

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  3. Inane mysteries built up one at a time create all new meanings.

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    1. Libby, As they say the best mysteries are mostly twisted! Thanks!:)

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  4. I have often felt this way, traffic can take the peace out of a day. Love this!

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    1. Oh yes, and you can't imagine how bizarre it is in India !! Glad you enjoyed :))Thanks a lot!

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  5. I think it is really disconcerting when one sees an accident happen. A person never knows when it will be his/her turn. I especially despise 'rush hours' and driving in snowy weather. "Long live the reflexes for survival" indeed!

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    1. Mary, Thank you for being here and sharing your viewpoint. Yes, reflexes are the body's rapid defense mechanism. They should keep guiding us to 'duck' or 'dodge'in response to external stimulus...:))

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    1. Thanks Vishal..:)Look forward to seeing you here again.

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  7. Hey I have nominated you for the popular "Liebster Award".
    http://advkaranshah.blogspot.in/2013/02/first-blogger-award_7.html

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    1. Hey, that's a great news. This is my seventh leibster award...my heartfelt appreciation, Karan:))

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  8. I'm sure you must have been cringing, with the story of the accidents fresh in your mind!

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    1. Oh yeah...association of thought is surprising indeed!Look forward to seeing you here again, Roshni...:)

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  9. Long live the survival instinct, indeed! Your poem paints a vivid picture. I watched and breathed a sigh of relief!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/02/05/despair/

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    1. Kim, Really glad to read your comment..! Yes, death is not uncommon in India's crowded roads! :)
      Thanks for the awesome prompt, Kim. Enjoyed writing this!

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  10. Wowie! I didn't even realise the form of the composition till I read the end note. Brilliant, Ma'am. And of course, I could feel the cars whizzing by as I sip my tiny plastic cup of chai, sitting on a rickety wooden bench next to a thela :D

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    1. Mixi...It's a delight to see you here always and am glad to read that you enjoyed this poem. Aah, you are such a precious reader, my dear:)) xoxo
      Thanks so much!

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    1. Thanks a lot, aliasgarmukhtiar!:)

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  12. I agree completely. We need to rely on instinct because our senses are overwhelmed. I like how you illustrated this poem's thesis with vivid detail and experience.

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    1. Susan, Thank you so much for your visit here and sharing your comments. It is interesting how our muscles constantly adjust their tone to protect us through reflexes. Glad you enjoyed, Susan.Thank you so much for leaving your encouraging comments.:))

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  13. wow a new form of poetry !!liked it :) and as for your poetry it's always unique nd amazing :)

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    1. Yes Saikat...This was the first time I tried my hands on writing this style of poetry...and I enjoyed writing this particular piece. Thanks for dropping by and for your encouragement...:)

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  14. Once bitten, twice shy, but this could take this form through your pen only. Wonderfully written, yes our reflexes protect us a lot of time, not only as bystanders but as drivers too.

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    1. Meenakshi, Good to see you here always... and feels good to read your appreciation. Thank God, the reflexes are there to protect us from potential dangers!:)

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  15. Hi Panchali ji,

    Ahh, poignant description of Reaction time of a driver. Indeed, reflexes are all that can be the difference between an accident and safe driving. Some people consider themselves to be a Pro and often resort to speeding, even on city roads. They forget that all it needs is just a split second of lapse of reflex and all is lost and gone.

    Lovely poem written, perhaps sitting at a tea stall?

    Regards

    Jay
    My Blog | My Entry to Indiblogger Get Published

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    1. I experienced it sitting at a dhaba recently. It was crazy sipping tea in such a dangerous locale...
      Really glad to read your comment !!Thanks Jay.

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  16. It is a horrible experience for the affected person if he lives alive after the accident.

    --------Hasib Sarker
    Reflex Testing

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    1. Thankfully...I narrowly averted an accident. Welcome to my pace, Hasib. Thanks!

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  17. Loved it....jealous of you....you weave the words so nicely...

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    1. Ranjana.no...no, there's no reason to envy. You're such a talented person yourself :)) Infact, I am jealous of you :D
      Thanks re..

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  18. That's beautiful, Panchali. I like it.

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    1. Thank you so much, Eashwar. Glad you enjoyed...:)

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  19. That was creative, Panchali:)

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    1. Rahul, Thank you for taking time to visit this space and share a comment...:)

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  20. beautiful and profound!! thank god! for relexes...to avert too sometimes! :)

    Akila

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    1. Thankfully I could, novel.... feels good to read your appreciation always :))Thanks!!

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  21. Yes life is indeed governed by our reflexes and it's immaculate conjugation with destiny... beautiful lines...loved it.

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    1. Anjan, Good to have you here after a long time. How have you been??
      Anyone traveling on our highway should be familiar with this. Such accidents are a routine feature of modern life...it's crazy! Happy to read your appreciation of my writing. :))
      Thanks a ton!

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  22. Reflexes ward off many dangers!
    Very interesting and creative poem!

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    1. Indeed...it does, Valli. These tea-stalls are built for crashes...Reactive behavior requires only reflex action.:)
      Compliments from you make my day!Thanks:)

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  23. wow ....now this was a very different poem .

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    1. That WOW..brought sunshine to my mood. Thanks, TTT!:)

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  24. I can so well imagine the entire sequence... Such an innovative way of penning down poetry. I surely need to learn this from you Mam... SO lovingly done ! :)

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    1. Tanya...Am glad to read your appreciation of his work. Thank you so much for taking time to visit this page and share your comment. Thanks much...my dear:)

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  25. Aaahhh....reflexes...never felt before...:)

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    1. FIF...what...? A reflex is an involuntary action that our body does without thinking. Being a human being, you must have definitely felt it in so many ways! Now, you got me worried...LOL.
      Thanks re..

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    1. Rajesh, Really glad to know that you found this insightful. Thanks so much!:)

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  27. Interesting form of poetry. Of course, what would we do without our reflexes.

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    1. Rachna, Indeed, God gave us amazing abilities and 'reflexes'. It's incredible how they work.
      Good to see you here after a long time. Thank you so much for taking time to read this post.:)

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  28. In one short verse you have conveyed so deep a thought... beautiful!

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    1. Welcome adatewithdelhi..:))
      Thank you so very much for your visit to this page and encouraging comments. Hope to see you more on these pages!

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  29. बेहतर रचना फिर एक बार, पर इस बार तारीफ नहीं करूँगा, आशा करता हूँ की आप अच्छी होगी, माफ़ी चाहता हूँ की काफी दिनों से मै internet का उपयोग अच्छी तरह से नहीं कर पाया हूँ। इस कारन मै आप के भी ब्लॉग पर बहोत दिनों बाद आया हूँ लेकिन महत्व पूर्ण बात ये है की मै आपके ब्लॉग को भुला नहीं हूँ, और आपको भी नहीं भुला हूँ, बस यही सोच रहा की शायद आपको मेरा नाम भी याद रहा की नहीं,

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    1. Lucky!! Aapako bhulna namumkin hi nahi--ASAMBAHV hai :D:D Aaap aye, hamara maan badaya... yeh apka badappan hai.
      Thanks a lot.
      In fact, I was thinking about you recently..So, it's telepathy!!! Glad you came by.. :)))

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  30. intertwined automatic instincts with phenomenal words..only you could have done this..and this form of poetry seems to be interesting enough..



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    1. Odyzz. Thanks gurl... you made my day :))
      Give it a shot..its easy.
      I'll check out your blog just now. But, temme why is followers widget not visible??.:((
      Please fix it.
      Thanks a ton:)

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    2. I tried to fix it up..look at the lower right corner of the screen on my blog and you will find a follow tab..hope it helps..If it doesn't please lemme know ..Will try to sort it out..Sorry for all the botheration..

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    3. Done!....you gain a new follower :D
      No botheration at all. I am mighty pleased now :)))
      Thanks Odyzz:)))

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    4. Pleasure is all mine :) :)..Thanks a ton..

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  31. Interesting observation. Long live the reflexes indeed - and long live us, thanks to them.

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    1. Honestly, it's incredible how they work, Rosemary!Long live the reflexes...indeed :)
      Thanks for dropping by...and for your comment.

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    1. Kappu! Good to see you here always. Glad you liked the structure...thanks :))))

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  33. Fun to read but the mystery of why drivers enjoy this escapes me still. I'm such a "weeny" because it sure does scare me. Nice write.

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    1. I agree with you, Judy. Even I wonder if it’s really worth burning all that gas/petrol and risking so many lives.Me not 'weeny' but it sure scare me too :D
      Thanks so much for that lovely comment. Hope I see you more here..

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  34. lovely lines.....'Long live the reflexes ..."survival reflexes get into work as soon as the baby arrives.read somewhere that those tiny little creeping in on baby's faces...I mean new born ones are also kind of survival reflex.something so cute and sweet too defined as a mechanism.

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    1. Wow...that's an informative comment, Namita. I know, fetus floats, by instinct in the womb. So, am not surprised :))
      Thanks for reading me re...and for your wonderful words of engagement...xoxo.

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  35. It's really a challenge to write in a structure. I can't do it. And thank god for our reflexes. :)

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    1. Oh, no! Of course...you can, Saru! It shouldn't be difficult for authors of your stature. So, go ahead!:))
      Thanks for being here re..

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    2. Ma'am, I just scribble as I don't want to end up in organizing dinners and shopping sprees. My mantra is keep your self busy :)

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    3. Dear Saru, As they say, great writers believe in themselves (So Should You)!! And I'm serious! Allocating time periods for writing is a great idea!! Keep writing, ...Perhaps, we enjoy more than you do :))
      hugzz

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  36. I don't think I can write a poem like that and make any sense either. good job!

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    1. Welcome Self Sagacity....I have to agree to disagree that you can't write a poem like this, though I have never read you. I guess, you caaaannn....give it a shot! Thank you for stopping by...Hope to see you more often :)

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  37. What a creative format you have! My favorite line of course is," long live the reflexes"!

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    1. I am glad you enjoyed, MM. Indeed...Long live the reflexes !:D

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  38. Brilliant poem. Ah, reflexes, how they guide us. Well done.

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    1. Thanks a ton, Willow, for your encouragement...Reflexes protect us from things that are potentially dangerous...so they are important!

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  39. I tried searching for your E-mail address ..I didn't wanna mess up here..but could not stop myself ... :)
    Actually I too wanted to taste the delicacies -Khichuri,Labra..,prepared for Saraswati puja.. slurp!!

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    1. Had I been too informal and intervening ,forgive me..

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    2. oh no...sweetheart! How did I miss this comment...Sorry:((((
      So, you picked up the hot-news from Indu's post...hehehee...Good, so are you also fond of Bangla cuisine?? Great, come over to Kolkata and be my guest. People say, I cook well--so you'll never regret!:)))))))))
      I am giving my e-mail id in my next comment. Please note it down, and I'll delete it tomorrow. Please don't mind...it was definitely not deliberate. hugzz..

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  40. Hi Panchali,I have never read a short poem with sooo much emotions.This the first time that I have seen this form of structure. The poem is amazing!!

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  41. Hi Usha...Coming from you, this is a very gratifying compliment. Thanks a lot... :)))

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