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i got back home
the sky had faded
into the blue dusk
and deepened into
twilight
revealing
beautiful stars one by one;
I pulled open the
door, looked up
a glimpse of such a beauty sells dreams
a glimpse of such a beauty sells dreams
the air whispered; and
I started walking towards the sea shore
darkness fell,
the moon rose over the horizon;
some nervous birds
leaped in fright
descended again,
squawked and took off once more
My eyes kept watching the restless moon
dipping, moving, bobbing along the sky...
dipping, moving, bobbing along the sky...
A wolf howled at a
distance disturbing my peace of mind
Unabashed, I kept pacing
relishing the solitariness and privacy..
of the magical, hazy, powdery night
Suddenly the wind
dropped; crickets fell silent
before I could
revel in the night's silence
I spotted a couple on the farthest tip of the beach
I spotted a couple on the farthest tip of the beach
Two dots were
moving along imperceptibly in the dark
somehow I was elated by the blindness; it teased me
The moon emerged
from behind
Silhouetted the
couple against the velvety blue night
The man gathered
the lady in his arms
Led her head
against his chest
Locked his lips
against her, and stepped aside
The night cloaked
the twosome…
The wind had a raw
edge to it
The lovers loping
by the sea shore, somehow
held me
captive; I kept moving on...
the two clumsy
figures kept shuffling, ebbing
in front of me for
sometime;
it was more than
real, that I'd longed to see
I called out, the
lady swung around
it was the creepiest black face, nothing less than a burned-out crater
she started taking her limbs off, like her clothes;
it was the creepiest black face, nothing less than a burned-out crater
she started taking her limbs off, like her clothes;
giggled and turned green in the color of seawater
I was
flabbergasted….I heard the wind howling
her laughter reverberated…; I started chasing her like mad
then stumbled upon something that froze me!
Two skeletons, with blood spilling out of their mouths
were gazing at me; suddenly
were gazing at me; suddenly
their lips twitched; murmured something
dashed into the water, disappeared...
I swerved …panicked, and tried to scream....
but something was squeezing my throat
… it didn't let my
voice emerge
I dropped down,
recounting history pages
-----------------
not long ago,
a couple had committed suicide
I fainted...
the waves pulled me out of my slumber
I fainted...
the waves pulled me out of my slumber
I couldn't recall, how I got down
into the water
and was wading,
slithering, slipping in there for so long
A buoy spilled a
blue ethereal light into the darkness,
eerily dappled across the frothy waves,
and lit the figures again in front of my eyes
and lit the figures again in front of my eyes
I became aware, that I had entered their restricted orbit,
they were wooing me into disillusionment
they were wooing me into disillusionment
It felt odd being
alone this time,
battling the forces of evil ain't easy
battling the forces of evil ain't easy
But, I lingered at
the threshold
to understand the true colors of the chameleons!
to understand the true colors of the chameleons!
Panchali,
ReplyDeleteHaunting, beautiful, and very well done.
I was on that beach. I saw the sky, felt the breeze, and experienced the curiosity until it turned to fear.
Thank you for sharing!
Yolanda...I am delighted with your presence! Your words motivate and encourage me. Thanks a million!:)
DeleteOh, Nice one!
ReplyDeleteThanks much, Meoww :))))
DeleteHauntingly visually evocative
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Deepak.:))
DeleteWhat a sight...I will be terrified to see the skeletons, and the ghostly couple by the beach ~
ReplyDeleteFine weaving ~ Thanks for your wonderful words in my blog ~
Thanks a ton, Heaven, for being so generous with your words for my writings! You are such a terrific writer, glad I met you here~
DeleteThat was a beautiful visual traet. I was totally immersed in the story of those two lovers and the twist in the end. Incredible writing. If I can manage to write poetry even remotely as good as you, I would be proud. Was a privilege reading it. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a million, Akshay! Always a pleasure to hear from you. But, how can you say you can't write poetry?? Just read a literary poetry written by you day before...it was a brilliant piece, undoubtedly!
DeleteThanks for the pat on the back...it humbles me everytime. Take care,
Woahh...what a picture. The post reminiscent of a house of horrors :)
ReplyDeleteGood work done :) Keep it going :)
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Jay
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Thanks Jay...Oh, how I loved 'the house of horror'--the half-drowned 'creeper' perhaps reminded you of the movie. I am extremely fond of watching horror movies!
DeleteThanks for your encouragement...:))
Wow!good twist in the end, I like the picture too...
ReplyDeleteWhat a pleasure to see you here,Meenakshi. Thank you for that lovely comment. I liked the pic too...quite scary, isn't it?
DeletePlease do come over again...:)
Thanks!!
I use to enjoy late evening strolls on beaches. You took that from me. I am never going to be alone near a sea beach again. Fear was very well expressed.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to friday writer's, I am sure you will enjoy this group :)
Thanks Ghaz! You have no idea what a big sigh of relief came out of me after reading your comment. Thanks for the encouragement.
DeleteWell, you know writing fiction/ romantic stories is not my forte. This time poetry was allowed. And then I had read Heaven's exclusive poems, which were coming in parts for this prompt.So, I got inspired..and decided to join the group. I am glad I did :D
Thanks a lot!
Very beautifully narrated...I could actually visualize it in front of my eyes till the time you said skeletons... I don't like horror as it gives me sleepless nights :/
ReplyDeleteMe!! I am soooo pleased that you came and read this...Hope you sleep well, my dear :))Thanks a ton!
DeleteOh, I love horror stuff u know...:D
Nice post. I used to be checking constantly this blog and I am impressed! Very helpful info particularly the closing part :) I deal with such info much. I used to be looking for this particular info for a long time. Thank you and good luck.
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Good luck to you too, TPL.. !! Thanks for the value addition..
DeleteThis was haunting !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Speck :)
DeleteOoooh! Lines can be scary too!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Indrani!
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ReplyDeleteNice one..just felt gosh bumps....ohhh..
Nice one
Thanks Panchali
Regards
Bhavik shah
Hi Bhawik...thanks for the encouragement!
Deletescary .. happy halloweeen .. so what is it going to be trick or treat :)
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No Halloween pardy for me...This is our festival time... Bengalis are celebrating Durga Puja all across the world!:))
DeleteHappy Halloween to you too!! Thanks...
beautiful written by every small details in this story from beginning to end it's marvelous write up
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Lucky!!Glad you liked. It is always thrilling to have you come and read. Thanks. :)
Deleteahhhhhhhhhhhhh...i am screaming in fear!! what a sensational piece of poetry! it is difficult to tell a story in a poem, but u did such a wonderful job! still shivering....
ReplyDeleteOMG...Hope your neighbors didn't break your main door hearing you screammmmm...goodness, hope all is well now, Li'l princess :)
DeleteBetter relax...it's a work of fiction after all :D:D
I am pleased and gratified that you liked this....Thanks much :)
that was great ... next time i go to a beach in the evening i am surely going to remember this poem :)
ReplyDeleteAwwww....TTT!! What more can I say...? :))))
DeleteGlad you visited. Hope you will keep coming.. :)
Thanks a million:))
Panchali you excel in whatever you take up-amazing!!!
ReplyDeleteIndu, Lovely comment...! You inspire me. I enjoyed your works too. In fact, more.... :)))
DeleteThanks for the pat n love,
hugz..
Clever use of words to bring about romance and then horror.
ReplyDeleteSally,
DeleteI am so pleased and gratified that you liked this. You are such a stupendous author...so, compliments from you made my day!:)))
Hope to see you more often on these pages!
I don't know why, I got a scary feeling at the end..Is that what you wanted ? :)
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DeleteThanks Rajesh!
ReplyDeleteWhat a haunting piece with a suspenseful ending... I hope he doesn't succumb. Well written.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kiru, for that lovely comment...Relax, I'll keep my protagonist safe.:D
DeleteJust read your mesmerizing post...awesome!
Hope to see you more on my space. Thanks!
I started reading as if it is not going to do anything to me... aha! Just text!
ReplyDeletebut then I was involved deeply as and when the scene moved on and when I reached the skeletons with blood in mouth; suddenly my phone rang to make me panic...
black magic?!?!
Sathish...If you believe in the power of Black Magic. So be it! Though I don't believe in Spells, magic, incantations, candle magic, black magic..You gave me goose bumps! Ewwwww...
DeleteLOL..Thanks for your spooky comment!:))
Nice one Panchali. You write so well. I like the vivid descriptions in your writing. When you wrote "some nervous birds leaped in fright
ReplyDeletedescended again, squawked and took off once more" I can connect many scenes from the forest with it. I read this at one go.
Sabyasachi
Thank you, Sabyasachi. You picked up my favorite line..I have felt this many times. The first time it happened, when I was walking silently along the sere, silent hillsides in Kufri. It really is a beautiful connection...breathtaking to say the least. God is great!
DeleteThanks for that wonderful comment. Good to have you here after a long time.
Regards,
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Thanks Vinay for the compliments! I do appreciate...:)
ReplyDeleteI was there, on the beach, watching as your narrator. Nicely done, Panchali. :)
ReplyDeleteCandilynn, I am so glad this poem found an echo in your heart...Its a pleasure to see you on my space... :))Do visit again.
DeleteThanks a ton!
Well written with suspense to guide us. So terrible in a way, the ghost of lovers that committed suicide. I hope they don't drag your heroine to her death.
ReplyDeleteNancy
Nancy...hahah I smiled reading your comment. No, don't worry, I shall keep my heroine safe!
DeleteGlad you read this one. And I enjoyed writing it too :)) Thanks a bunch. Hope to see you more on these pages..:D
Hi Panchali. I was your first commenter, came back today and see it isn't there. I'll try again. I loved this story, so poetically presented. You had me there on the beach, so powerful was your imagery. It is always a beautiful mix - romance and suspense. Oh, what's going to happen?
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for writing for our Halloween blogfest. Your poetry is so well received! :D
Denise,
DeleteI don't know what happened to your comment...Glad you came back to post your feedback. I appreciate your gesture...wonderful.:))
Indeed, romance and suspense make a story more delicious.I am pleased you enjoyed. And I am not saying this merely as a polite response, I mean it! Thanks~
Best of luck with the judging! I'm glad it's Ann and Nas who have to choose from this awesome lineup! :D
ReplyDeleteI understand...it must be a mammoth task to select posts for the award! Goodness...all the best to the whole Team!
DeleteAwesome; a haunted place, romantic love from beyond the grave, and a witness to the love eternal. Very well written Panchali.
ReplyDelete.......dhole
...dhole!Thank you so much for the pat on the back..it means so much! Much appreciated and treasured. :)))Thank you!
DeleteGod bless you ...
Panchali, I am commenting from Poets United. The link you shared is one which also has Mr. Linky's attached; so it is a MEME...so officially I cannot allow your link to stand. Would it be possible for you to link a different poem with our Think Tank? Perhaps this is something you didn't know; but if I let your link stand, I would have to allow others. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary, I was not aware of this linky thing...it's alright! Shall come back with more ...next week :)
DeleteBeautiful writing, each line created a haunting imagery in my mind. What I truly loved about this piece was that it was not only about ghosts but also about love, bonding and the purity that is associated with it.
ReplyDeleteYour expressions are so flawless, every time I am here I am only left in awe :) Really beautiful, All the best with the meme :)
Arti, Thank you so much for adding value to my blog... and for your unstinting validation.I marvel at your keen sense of understanding :)
DeleteThis poetry had to have a romantic angle...so, I couldn't have avoided this 'love'factor :P
I am so pleased, Arti to know that you liked this poem. Thanks for your encouragement...means a lot!! Please do visit again. Thanks~
Creepy haunting poetry, Panchali! Happy Halloween:)
ReplyDeleteRahul, Thanks for coming by.... good to see you here.Happy Halloween to you too! Ewww...
DeleteIt is so difficult to write a poem on Horror!...You created a scary mood in the poem.....Good one!!
ReplyDeleteLOL...There's never a dull moment in blogging. Try it... :))))
DeleteThanks for the kind words, Valli.
scary... haunting ...OMG..you really have a good hand in writing this genre of poetry too...Great :)
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Thanks for the compliment, odyzz... :)))))
DeleteJust read your entry and posted my comment there. Thanks for being here...and do visit again, please.
Hi, Panchali,
ReplyDeleteThis is the kind of poem that will haunt you even in the daylight. Beautiful in its description and emotion. I was caught up into it as if the waves undertow pulled me in.
Well done!
Hi Michael, Wonderful having you here!! Thanks for the compliment. Coming from an author of your stature, it means a lot to me...thanks friend.Hope to see you more on these pages..
DeleteThank you!
Happy halloween, the poem really called for the scary mood! :) hehe
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Thanks Tanya. Happy Halloween...ewwww..scary greetings! lol..
DeleteThanks for the info..! Have played also..:))) Elated.... !!
Beautiful imagery, the sense of peace in giving in. Well written.
ReplyDeleteErin Kane Spock...I am so happy that the overall effect was not one of sadness.It was a pleasure to see you on my space. Thanks for the visit. :) Much appreciated!
DeleteI think this is the first poem I have seen for this challenge so far! At the same time, it still had that narrative element, making it seem like a story. You intertwined both essential elements -- the spooky one and romantic one -- into your poem well. Beautiful imagery and word choice. I especially liked, "A buoy spilled a blue ethereal light into the darkness." Nice!
ReplyDeleteApologies, I am just now getting through all of the House of Horrors excerpts. Hope you're having a good weekend!
~Wendy Lu
The Red Angel Blog
Fantastic imagery throughout Panchali. I especially love your interpretations of the moon and sky--gorgeous. Rich with color and intrigue!
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