Monday, February 25, 2013

Garden Of Moon~

© Isadora Gruye



When past arrives cloaked with colors and scents
All I see is love—still so dear to me; though I know you’re gone,
Sounds of birds, insects, and footsteps reach me with love-words
I never learnt to compromise---I did not.

An ache lives on, my heart  still impatient, unused like my garden...withering away by a process of age, without the touch of your green-fingers.
I come and sit on the bench every evening, as the twilight thickens; with me, a night-lotus blossoms like a candle in a crystal bowl.
Moonlight skims through the trees, light the night-flowers; a trellis of jasmine flickers and there's a  strange presence in the garden of Moon.
A shadow shifts under the jasmine bush; the air gets softer and warm; you arrive, drape me in your arms informing me, you still loved your moody wife.

The winds drop, crickets go silent; the big banyan tree suddenly throws a strange pattern of light onto the plaque bearing our house number, the plaque looks tilted; I feel liking reaching out to straighten it.
But…you do not let me go...  I grab you and whisper,’ time has lost its meaning, honey; the air we breathe is so different now, mingling past n present makes no sense today’; I didn't realize, my words hurt the spirit of the night.
I try to get up, finding no one in the vicinity…  fear gather in me;  I look towards the night sky.
Sorrow sits on my heart; but I know, its best we remain the way we are…

Fireflies have suddenly gone into hiding, the leaves of the trees, are now glistening like diamonds in front of me; a thin film of mist settle in the yard.
I sit down finally, looking at the emptiness around me, I know, I have this ‘I’ to battle with...; what exists must exist, only compositions must change appropriately.



Written for the-sunday-mini-challenge-14-liners

Also shared it with :Poet's United

80 comments:

  1. Panchali, what a depthful poem! So many rich lines. To me this poem is mystical and begs to be read and reread to discover all the shades of meaning.

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    1. Thank you, Mary. Sorry about the delay...was too busy with the poets united thingy!! You continue to be my inspiration...am glad you enjoyed reading this poem. So humbled..!! Thank you!:)

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  2. This poem is so very deep and reflective and deserves to be read more than once. Truly a remarkable piece.

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    1. Lisa!Thanks for that awesome comment... it thrills me each time.. :)))))Your words of encouragement mean so much!!
      Thanks!

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  3. What a fantastic poem this is. The human condition: that ache, the longing for the richness of times past, the dream of the phantom husband who "still loves his moody wife", and the realization she is sitting there alone. How poignant. How wonderfully complex. How richly experienced and expressed.

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    1. Sherry, You have caught the nuance of the story with neatness.Your and Mary's encouragements have been VITAL to my growth as a poet. And I guess THIS is what one writes foR...
      Thanks a ton:))

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  4. Conflicts, depth, longing, mystery of nature, It demands for a personal experience to write like this. But you ma'am are a conjurer...of words, visuals and feelings. It is a haunting piece.

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    1. Meenakshi, I am sorry about the delay. Was busy with Poets United Interview. I think, you missed the interview..Please do, when you have the time. People who are close to my heart must read 'my story'! The link is right on the top of the page..hope, I am not being a pest!!:((
      Thanks for the lovely comment...and for the understanding. Thank you...

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  5. Profound and immaculate, Panchali!
    (lovely picture too, to enhance the effect:))
    I loved them together!

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    1. Thank you, Amit! And I am sorry about the delayed revert..:(

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  6. The way you weave words to create an intricate tapestry of memories, emotions, sights, sounds, smells - it is sheer artistry. There is so much longing, so much love in these lines that we instantly feel what you're feeling, see what you're seeing...

    A masterpiece of a poem, ma'am!

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    1. Mixi!!You are so good for my ego girl...! I am pleased you liked this...:)Thanks a ton re...

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  7. Rich and full of depth, really excellent and from the heart

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    1. Thanks for dropping in and giving me a thumbs up, Mametz... :))))

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  8. Profound! Di..To say that We or Us has always been beautiful than the solitary, yet the mighty I takes over... sad but true...that I remains to battle with, hopefully to be better composed for new compositions!

    :)

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    1. Thanks Akila...for that thumbs up..It means a lot. :))))

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  9. Actually was in a trance after reading it...twice was it the depiction of loneliness or was it the effect of moon on a pleasant night...?

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    1. Oh, I am glad I didn't disappoint you, Anjan. Thanks a ton!! But, I'm sorry about the late revert.

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  10. Beautiful poetry.....emotions were very nicely depicted.Just loved it:)

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    1. Welcome to my space, Bushra!!:)) Glad you enjoyed this,... Thanks for the visit... :)))

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  11. Wonderful poem.....

    http://debnature.blogspot.in

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    1. Thanks Debopram...Thanks for the visit and the appreciation... :)

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  12. wonderful composition..

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  13. Sorrows always sit on our hearts, nagging; and the best way to combat them is to remain the way we are. Omg! What a weave of words.

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    1. Yes, Eashwar..that's what it is!! Thank you for your kind words. I am elated!!
      Sorry about the delayed revert!

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  14. While I cannot comment on this poem as regards format, since it is not written in 14 lines, I commend it as a response to Isadora's photograph.

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    1. I know..I know...kerry. Thoughts fly everywhere... one should be good with lateral thinking. Next time, I'll be careful!!:))

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  15. I have this I to battle with superb line
    visit back http://shalinisamuel.blogspot.in/

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    1. Thank you so much, Shalini! Welcome to my space...

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  16. beautiful composition...to defeat the sorrows its always best to be the way we are !!!

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    1. You are right, Karan!Thanks for the visit and the appreciation..

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  17. great pic, and thoughtful lines.

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    1. Thanks Indrani for your constant support. I am grateful:)

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  18. Deep and evocative, this picture you paint.

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    1. Thanks a lot, Kim!So happy you liked this... thanks for coming by... :)))

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  19. Welcome Panchali!
    Very good, very touching poem.
    I am delighted with it.
    I send greetings.
    Lucia

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    1. Thank you, Lucia. Great to see you here always.... you made my day... :)))))
      Greetings from India!!
      A request, Lucia, please read my interview with poets united to know more about me...when you have the time. You'll find the link on the top of this page. Thanks!
      xoxo

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  20. A lovely response ~ Thanks for sharing your musings and thoughts in your heart ~

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    1. Your comment delights me... thanks a lot...Grace!:))

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  21. For a while you got me sitting there on that bench and 'feeling it all, every bit of it!

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    1. Thanks for that beautiful comment, Divya. I am touched...:))
      A request--Would you read my interview with Poets United? The link is on the side bar...I would love it!:))
      Thanks!

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  22. Brilliant! The imagery is remarkable!

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    1. Thanks for your kind words, Deepak. I am delighted!!:)

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  23. Wow. Really wow piece of writing. I Can feel your words.

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    1. Great to see you here, Meoww.... you made my day... :)))))

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  24. Beautifully descriptive. I love "a night lotus blossoms like a candle in a crystal bowl...and many other descriptions. There is longing in trying to communicate something from yourself, and it seemingly doesn't happen, again. First line second stanza, wow. Such a sad poem, a poem of longing for connection, for being seen, inside. Incredible writing.

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    1. Great to have you here, Willow!!Thanks for coming by and sharing your thoughts... and you've read it so well!!So humbled!! Thank you!:)

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  25. another masterful creation ,,loved it :)

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  26. beautiful words panchali cld feel the depth ...

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    1. Good to have you here after a long time, Alka!! Thanks a lot for coming by...:))

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  27. Wow! what a remarkable imagery! This is how complex relationships can get and what better than a beautiful moonlit night to reflect on them. So heartfelt and touching!

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    1. Arti, Thank you so much... your appreciation is like a tonic for me.. :)))Your generous words mean so much, my friend. !!

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    1. Thank you, Rajesh. I am delighted!!:)

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  29. beautiful...
    www.duringmytimes.com

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    1. Thank you, Rajnish. Welcome to my space :))

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  30. Vibrant imagery twined with intense longing and an equally overbearing sense of loss gradually transforming into a spiritual revelation...."I have this I to battle with"...

    Geetashree
    http://panaecea.wordpress.com

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    1. Geetashree...Battling the Self is the biggest challenge. 'I' is the only enemy, though it may sound complicated. Taken from the perspective of Dalailama, we as individuals have much more inner strength than we realize. So, it's all in the mind!!
      Thanks for dropping in... Would love to see you more on these pages!!:)



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  31. The poignance shadowing in your lines is too soulful . The poem struck me harder and harder as i passed from one line to the other . Brilliant ma'm !

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    1. Thank you, Maliny!Glad I was able to engage you.. :)) *patting her own back* :P

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  32. Highly evocative ..you have poured down your soul and it tugs somewhere deep inside....marvellous!!

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    1. Awww Odyzz...You make me feel so good always... thanks for the pat on the back... it means so much to me... :)))))
      Thanks a ton!!

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    2. You truly deserve every bit of applaud and cheer... Smiles




      http://odizzey.wordpress.com/2013/02/24/head-or-heart-blogadda-wow

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    3. whoa...what a story!!

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  33. A lot of emotion... and I actually think it would be quite marvelous edited to a true 14 lines. Self-editing is painful, but I think you would be quite pleased with the result!

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    1. I understand what you mean, Margaret. But, muse was playing and, I couldn't stop ... i couldn't be ruthless, you see... :(((
      Thanks for that much needed shot--Now, I am surely going to edit it soon!Thanks for the frank comment.

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    2. It IS lovely as it stands. Don't get me wrong. BUT I find that often (not always) I am pleased with the shorter versions (after much groaning and complaining. Ha

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    3. Oh no..no, Margaret!Don't worry..I know, what you mean.It is wonderful to learn new things!Btw....remember the quote..?? LOL..
      "..Creativity means to push open the heavy, groaning doorway to life.~ Daisaku Ikeda :)))))

      Am truly pleased :)

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  34. Panchali,

    I am pleased to have located your Blog!!!
    I love your words which are heavy with emotion, sorrow and yet some hope to continue. Pausing to contemplate at times, can go either via the path of happiness, or sometimes, the heavy path of reflection and sadness...Life balances usually...

    Best wishes,
    Eileen:)

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    1. Eileen, Great to have you here...!!Oh, you read it so well....life balances, indeed!!We, as individuals have much more power over our lives than we realize and unconsciously use this power to create what we expect.
      Thank you once again for reading me, and for the kind comments. I'll be in your space soon.
      Hope to see you more on these pages...:)
      Love n best wishes to you too, elieen:))

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  35. A poignant one, Panchali!

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    1. Thanks Rahul. Good to see you after a long time. Thanks for stopping by...:)

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  36. At the risk of sounding cliched - Its so beautifully poignant ! Some say true art is a product of grief and not of happiness.

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    1. Thank you so much, seriously, for being such a wonderful person, and most of all, friend, the moonstone:)
      Yes, sentiments and emotions play a big role in art and creativity! :)
      Thanks!!

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  37. You have depicted the pathos of a pining wife so beautifully.And the imagery of the garden-it is so complete & vivid.
    Panchali how do you get onto the spirit of every character?

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    1. Indu, We truly are soul-sisters!!! I'm so honored and humbled by the words you grace me with here everytime. Thanks a lot!!

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