Sunday, October 07, 2012

Journey Of My Mind


This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 32; the thirty-second edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is 'An Untold Story'


Every night, as I try to sleep
The haze of the moon tracks down
The center of my mind,
And snaps something in me;
I hesitate a bit, put my thoughts together
Dim figures flit through my memory
 Heighten my sense of struggle
 The air ride on the shaft, inside me...
My mind leans against the dark sky
Trapped in a mire of reality, it
Starts walking on the orderly dots
Extracts just the deserving portions
Blotting away the grimy realities
The lies trip from my mouth...
‘Me’ mooch my identity
I lie for my own sake
A well-disguised mirage protects
 ‘An untold story’ of ME 
on earth’s memory…
I smile…
How easily lies and deceits make a deal
And make me secured in this world
Unabated, I continue to survive all the
Autumns of ambiguities of life...

 Photo: Few there are to walk beside you
through the valley of tears and sorrow.
More the times, you walk alone, 
than the times that they befriend.
Lonely is the journey there
and dark the jagged painful path.
Your tears they flow upon the stones
that rip away the bloodied flesh.
The light ahead, it slowly dims
as deeper down the path sojourns.
To hold a hand along the way
Might keep the feet upright that stumble.
Alone you see this path that ends;
Beyond the valley, a light, it glows
With angel guiding as you walk;
Last mile of life not walked alone

The fellow Blog-a-Tonics who took part in this Blog-a-Ton and links to their respective posts can be checked here. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. Introduced By: Jayashree, Participation Count: 05

105 comments:

  1. ‘Me’ mooch my identity....i think there's a little bit that mooching in everyone one of us, and a little bit of the story remains untold too..

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    1. li'l princess, good to know that you agree :))Pleasure to have you here always. Thanks

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  2. something that flows out from the crack of every heart, a blend of melancholy with the mist of hidden feelings.
    Bow.

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    1. Sathish, Thanks for the delightful comment...better than my verses, I say !! Take a bow. :D

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  3. Sooo very profound, and absolutely wonderful in a delicate and subtle way! I loved it Panchali:)
    All the best:)

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    1. Thanks a lot for your valuable comment, Amit! Glad you enjoyed so much :))

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  4. Felt like m reading my own story.. loved it mam..:)

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    1. Yes, Ayushi...self-reflection is very much part of a human mind...so it must have been easy to relate to this poem. Thanks for being here and I hope to see you more :))
      Thanks !!

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  5. beautifully written!

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    1. Love your enthusiasm, Ash...:)Thanks a bunch!

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  6. lovely words...nicely crafted lines!

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    1. Thanks Kalyan P....! I am SO pleased you liked this!:)

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  7. The untold story is well-told. Liked your vivid expressions that you've put into words.

    ~Sayantini Bhattacharya
    another part of me

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    1. Welcome to my space, Sayantini. Thanks for the appreciation:)Do visit again..please!

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    1. Thanks Deepak. Good to see you always... :))))

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  9. I like the untold story of survival ~ Nice one ~

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    1. Happy you liked the poem, Heaven. permit me to feel pleased.
      Thanks for coming by...:)

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  10. A strong poem...with some gut-level thoughts. I think everyone can benefit from some self reflection.

    "How easily lies and deceits make a deal
    And make me secured in this world
    Unabated, I continue to survive all the
    Autumns of ambiguity in life..."

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    1. Mary, You read it so well. Now, I am very satisfied....
      Thanks for the inspiration...:)

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  11. 'I lie for my own sake'......nice one! :)

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    1. Thank you, Gayatri... its a great pleasure to see you on these pages... :))))

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  12. I was struck by the same stanza as Mary. Wonderful closing lines.

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    1. Sherry Blue Sky...Thanks a lot, for coming back with your encouragement. I really appreciate it..♥

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  13. This is so lovely ! so very profound ! All the very best ...

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    1. Thanks TTT....for your wishes and comments!

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  14. This one is so full of emotions ... untold words really ... loved it !!!

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    1. Green Speck, ...its encouragement from all the readers make my day!! Thanks!!

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  15. This piece has a lot of depth. I love how it brings forth one's emotions.

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    1. Thanks Laura Maria for that wonderful feedback. You yourself are a great poet...:)
      happy writing

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  16. A lovely poem, especially love that line "the haze of the moon tracks down the center of my mind" what a creative and beautiful image!

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    1. Welcome to my space, Sara. Thanks for coming by... it was such a pleasure. :))))

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  17. This poem reflects your thoughts so very delicately,it is deeep & sombre but the last para is a reprieve.Good luck Panchali.

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    1. Indu...I have been following your blogs for a long time...i hope I write as well as u someday...:)Thanks for your wishes..:)

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  18. Lovely...liked "‘An untold story’ of ME ". Feel everyone has an untold story

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    1. Ranjana, I am glad you liked this.. Thanks for the visit... :))

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  19. This was so beautiful Panchali di... Such profound emotions put so wonderfully into words... Wish I could write like this! I am voting for you

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    1. Awww..Rajrupa, such compliments from a writer of your stature make me happy!!I was hoping readers might not understand the point...but, I'm glad that the words came across accurately. So glad you came by!Thanks sweetheart for ur precious vote!
      I shall check out the entries soon. Am going slow since I am not so well...

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  20. this was amazing one mam .....so beautiful :):)

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    1. Vinisha, I am pleased that you liked the poem. Thank you for your visit and kind words:)

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  21. Lovely, loved it! I esp like the usage of word- mooch here.

    I will vote for you mate :)

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    1. Aww...numerounity, Am pleased you you found it so! Thanks for visiting and commenting.
      And a special box of chocolates for your precious vote, my dear♥ *smiles*

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  22. "How easily lies and deceits make a deal
    And make me secured in this world"

    aint that the truth.. how people use it for their benefit

    Bikram's

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    1. Bikram...the truth is that truth hurts...:) I guess that says it all...:)) Thanks for your very valuable feedback.:))

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  23. thoughts are wonderfully woven into words..


    I am here
    http://odizzey.wordpress.com/2012/10/07/an-untold-story/

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    1. Odyzz...I really appreciate your feedback....Feels so good :D
      Thank you!!

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  24. Oh God..such a beautiful narration..and the last lines… <3 <3

    love
    http://www.meghasarin.com

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    1. Awww..Megha, I am sooo pleased you liked this. Feeling smug. :))
      Thanks again for giving us an opportunity to write something on that phrase...it was quite a challenge though.. !!♥

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  25. Autumns of ambiguity in life... That's so amazing. Such a treat to read your lovely poems, no doubt it was featured in Blog-a-ton. I really loved the flow of words from the moonlight & the untold story all carved in such a wonderful manner. :)

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    1. Tanya! Welcome to my space, I believe this is your first visit here. :)
      Always good to reflect on how we're managing our lives...I am pleased you find my thoughts coherent. :))))Your comment is the cherry on top. Thank you for your very 'sedate' words of appreciation.♥
      Hope to see you more on these pages. Thanks a lot!!-)

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  26. We all have some hidden emotions that is hard to express. But you did well.

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    1. Rajesh, Life demands justice, liberation...so this was a sort of a sunrise of a flawless mind :P
      Thanks so much!

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  27. What an interesting meme. You write beautifully. You asked about sun-dried tomatoes. Thet can be made at home. Instructions can be found at : http://www.pickyourown.org/tomatoes_sun_dried.htmns

    Havea great day. Blessings...Mary

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    1. Thanks a lot, Mary for the link. Checked it,... it's quite easy...Am going to make some asap. Oh, What a lovely gesture. I am grateful...:))
      Thanks for the compliments. You have a great day ahead...love,

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  28. Dear Panchalidi,

    This poem is so you..! I could spot your presence as a writer from the first line.
    Some of the expression used here are so you, from the start but more so towards the ending. It seems to me that you started this poem off hand and got really involved. Best <3

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    1. Thanks for the endorsement, Ghaz...:) But, this time I was quite focused from the very beginning...so didn't allow my emotions to move an inch--LOL..Hope you didn't mean that the parts were incoherent! OMG...
      Thanks anyway for being here...♥

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  29. all of us, in varying degrees, keep preparing a face to meet the faces that we meet.very honestly expressed. i especially liked the autumns of ambiguity.

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    1. Abin, Thanks for the compliment...! I am much gratified... :)))) Do visit again, please.

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  30. I don’t even know how I finished up here, however I thought this poem was once great. I don’t know who you’re however definitely you’re going to a famous blogger in case you are not already Cheers! From India

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    1. Always Unlucky !! Well...I don't know if you are lucky or unlucky, but I am sure, I am lucky to have you here :) I have no idea whether I am famous or not, but blogging is interesting. Makes me hang here to the last hour :D
      Thanks for stopping by...and hope to see you more on my pages.
      btw...I loved your pics..worth watching!!!

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  31. Very beautifully expressed. Enjoyed the lines!

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    1. Thanks for the compliments, aativas. I am so much gratified :)
      Your khan Market blog is just too good! ATB for BAT~

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    hope more people discover your blog because you really know what you’re talking about. Can’t wait to read more from you!
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    1. Thank you James Atel...Okay, please keep reading me!

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  33. I think you have done a great job incorporating the ideas in your poem.
    Well done and all the best.:)

    Do visit mine http://www.stylisharjun.blogspot.in/2012/10/an-untold-story.html

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    1. Glad you agree with the treatment.., Arjun. Thanks so much! Shall surely visit your blog soon...

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  34. Hi Panchali di

    I think this poem should have flown effortlessly from your mind....The flow is so smooth and beautiful....and on a totally different level....I would be lying if I said I understood every line the way you intended(probably)...I read it thrice until now and every time it seemed to say new things...And thats the mark of impeccable poetry....Kudos :D

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    1. Jayashree...You really are paying me the kind of compliments that a writer covets. I need not tell you how pleased I am. :))
      I am sure, a good writer like you must have understood every line very clearly...I can have no doubts on that :) Thanks for your support and encouragement..xoxo

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  35. Very profound. Like always :-) autumns of ambiguities of life, brilliant capturing. Well written.

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    1. Thanks for the visit, Ash. Peer-correction is an essential technique..and you have that :)Sounds cool now. Thanks..!

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  36. Strong words & stronger emotions..love the combination...

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    1. Thanks Rinaya...I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the compliment... and for the visit. :))))

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  37. Unsaid emotions really! ATB for BAT!

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  38. Thank you for your all lovely comment ma'm
    From Socking Images

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    1. AU---How I have started hating your name...grrrr. Hope you'll not mind if I call you 'Aye LUCKY'...! :))
      I am so glad that you came and left a comment on this page. The handle led me to your magic land---where the written part is fabulous and the unwritten is mystic:)You have got a fan now :D
      Thanks...:))))

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  39. As if looking into a mirror...all day long you wear a mask, at night it comes off...the real self can be scary!

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    1. Welcome to my page, Meenakshi. You heard the 'unsaid'--and am so pleased :) Thank you so much! Have you participated in BAT--I will be there soon :)

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  40. Very surviving deep in the body.
    Brilliant. I am delighted.

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    1. Thnks Lucja-Maria...Your words matter to me more than I can tell you. Thanks for that awesome comment...I am so pleased. Do stay in touch, please :)))

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  41. An Untold Story , well told, Panchali:) Best of luck!

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    1. Rahul, I am glad you heard the 'unsaid'-- It is a gift to me, one I appreciate deeply.
      Thanks a bunch :) I hope to see you more on these pages...

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  42. Beautifully crafted poem overflowing with emotions. Loved it :)

    please do visit my entry: http://ponderingtwo.blogspot.in/2012/10/love-torn.html

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    1. Welcome aboard, Rohan, thanks for the wonderful observation!I shall be there soon...thank you!

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  43. deep deep deep...!! loved it till the end! as always, PanchaliDi, u rock! \m/

    BAT32-Apala

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    1. Apala---Thank you for the implied Kudos. Coming from you, it thrills me to the core!!!!!
      I shall be in your space soon...:))

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  44. I am here for the first time, thanks to the Blogaton contest :)
    I can so relate with your poem and I really like the way you have penned down this "Journey of Mind" which remains untold... All of us have experienced this..at some point of time!

    All the best for BAT 32 :)

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    1. Welcome to my space, Megha.I am pleased you enjoyed this.. :))Yes it does describe a very intense and private moment. Indescribable... almost undefinable, but that's reality!!
      Thank you for stopping by...and I hope to see you more on these pages.
      Thanks a ton!!I will be in your space soon..

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    2. I had to come back here just to thank you.. that your remarks on my poem made me a follower here.. :)
      (And I realized that our poems were so much like each other :) .. )
      They are about "state of being" familiar to all.. and undefined by words :)

      Thanks again :)

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    3. wow! That's so nice of you, Megha :)) So, wise women think alike...? !! Your poem was awesome indeed! Thanks for coming back. xoxo

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    4. Yup great minds think alike :D hehehe..
      XOXO :) .. Keep Smiling.. I am going to be here..to spread some smiles.. and to get a few hugs! :D ..

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    5. Hugz back, Megha--- This back and forth conversation gave me significant 100!! Yayyyy!! Henceforth, I'll be waiting for your comments...
      Thank you...thank you :)))))))))))))))) XOXO

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  45. Wonderful poetry. I could see the image of a moon in my thoughts. Great imageries. Panchali u will win the cup. Allthebest for bat

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    1. Wow...Tomz!! This is like a Eureka moment...! And it thrills me to the core to know that you feel I'm going to win the cup this time...!!!!Let's wait n watch!!:D
      Thank you for the implied Kudos. :))))
      Thanks a ton!!
      I must start reading all the entries now...

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  46. How easily lies and deceits make a deal And make me secured in this world...so true
    ATB for BAT :)

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    1. Thanks Karan Shah ...Good to have you here :))

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  47. "Nothing could be better than those words that flows from heart" - Loved it Panchali. Keep writing and Good luck to you!

    Someone is Special

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    1. SIS....Delighted with your comment.. and visit of course. :))) I am glad you liked it!
      Tomorrow onward... I will concentrating only on Blog-a-ton! I need to finish reading the rest of the blogs to start voting!
      Thanks a ton :) I was actually waiting for you to come and read this!

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  48. Dhasu!

    As always, something great I get to read here. I liked it a lot.

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    1. wow !! what a stupendous comment...thankssssssssssssssss Kshitij!

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  49. Wom ma'm.. I am one of your new readers.. but I am loving every bit of it.. there is depth to your writing.. i look forward to learn a lot from you..

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